CCA Step 6 (Draft of Essay and Final Essay)

By , December 15, 2011 11:18 pm

The final essay due date is Fri. June 19. I cannot accept any later submissions. These essays take time to mark.

The final essay requires:

  • Introductory paragraph
  • Body paragraphs, each with topic and concluding sentences
  • Connection to thesis/HTC paragraphs (if they are separate – otherwise part of body paragraphs)
  • Concluding paragraph
  • Footnotes for ALL evidence Footnote_Format_2020
  • Bibliography at the end (does not count in page count)
  • Max 12 pages double-spaced (minimum 10 point font, normal margins)

 There is a video on Google Classroom explaining and showing how to turn citations into proper footnotes!

There is also a video showing how to divide large sub-topics into smaller paragraphs.


when Ms. G was working on turning her essay outline into a draft she did the following things IN THIS ORDER:

  1. first made all changes/improvements in the outline
  2. then converted tables to text
  3. made separate paragraphs for connections to thesis/HTC (because body paragraphs were getting too long in some cases – not all)
  4. converted mini citations into footnotes (this can take a long time – give yourself enough time – you might want to do it in the outline first???)
  5. added bibliography
  6. divided large sub-topics into smaller body paragraphs
  7. wrote basic topic and concluding sentences for body paragraphs
  8. added intro paragraph (leave this until the end)
  9. added concluding paragraph

 * Special note – make sure each paragraph has a connection to thesis!

Samples (and process from previous years):

This year

I am still calling it outline draft 4 but you will see that I have gotten rid of the rows and columns and have proper footnotes. The bibliography is incomplete and a lot of formatting still needs to be done. But now I have an idea that my essay is too long because the page limit is 12! So a lot of editing will be required.


Now I have tidied up my footnotes and bibliography (though there is still a footnote issue I need to deal with and I have to add the rest of my sources from my notes to the bib). I have added some concluding sentences (still need a few more). I have decided where I am going to break up large paragraphs into smaller ones (though I haven’t done it yet – note – when you break a large paragraph up you have to remember to that each paragraph needs a TS and a CS).

CHY4U_MsG_Essay_Draft2_2020 (June 4)

Now I’m working on breaking up my large sub-topics into smaller paragraphs, making sure all paragraphs have a topic and concluding sentence. The introductory and concluding paragraphs are done, too.

CHY4U_MsG_Essay_Draft3_2020 (June 5)

My second last draft (I hope): I cleaned up the newly created paragraphs and made sure they all have TSs and CSs. I bolded some more HTC terms throughout the essay. I eliminated my last example as it caused my essay to be over the maximum page limit. I think I’ll do one more clean up draft and that’ll be it.

CHY4U_MsG_Essay_Draft4_2020 (June 10)

I have now finished my final essay. I went through my paragraphs again and made sure everything flowed. I noticed that a few paragraphs were missing connections to thesis! I fixed that. Please makes sure to add page numbers and a title page. Remember, the page limit for the essay itself is 12! Do not go past that.




Ms. G__Step5_Essay_Draft_1_2019 (May 18 – I converted tables to text, added footnotes, noted where to add TSs and CSs, noted that some paragraphs might need splitting, noted where to add Intro and Conclusion, added bibliography.)

Ms. G__Step6_Essay_Draft_2_2019 (May 20 – I added most of the TSs and CSs. I separated some of the HTCs into new paragraphs. I finished the intro. I finished most of the conclusion.  I still have to fix up some of the footnotes and finish off the conclusion. I need to make sure the transitions are effective).

Ms.-G__Step6_Essay_Draft_3_2019 (June 4 – I finished splitting large paragraphs. Added more transitions. I still need to finish the conclusion and get rid of all the headings.)


MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft1_2017-18 (Dec. 20 – I converted my tables to text, added footnotes, noted where to add TSs and CSs, split up some paragraphs, noted where to add Intro and Conclusion)

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft2_2017-18 (Dec. 30 and Jan. 1 – I added in all TSs and CSs, blocked out my intro and conclusion, divided large sub-topics, added in some transitions. I still need to add bibliography and fix up my footnotes).

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft3_2017-18 (Jan. 9 – Mostly finished – added bibliography but still need to edit its format; still need to fix up some footnotes, Finished intro and conclusion. )

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft4_2017-18 (Jan. 12 – Mostly finished – added title page – make sure yours doesn’t have a number on it)

MsG_CHY4U_Essay_Draft1_May22_2016 (last year)

  • I inserted comments to highlight for you the process I took to turn my outline into a draft
  • If you wrote your outline on the template, make sure you convert it from table to text


Essay Rubric:


take a good look to see where your marks will come from 


Editing and proofreading:

editing involves revising the structure (changing the order of examples, sub-dividing sub-topics into body paragraphs, changing the order of sub-topics, making sure connections to thesis are in the correct place, making sure all body paragraphs have TSs and CSs, making sure all evidence is cited [footnoted])

proofreading  involves checking spelling, grammar and style (third person academic)




Self and Peer Evaluation:

CHY4U_CCA_Essay_SelfPeer_Eval_2017-18 (this is mainly for structure). You are welcome to exchange with another student but I will not be making this part of the official process this year (June 2020).


Worksheets in CCA Handout Package:


More common grammar errors


CHY 4U How to improve your knowledge mark for the CCA Essay_Revised





Structure Tips:

Intro – 3 components: hook, summary of sub-topics, thesis statement. Nothing more, nothing less. I like to use the analogy of a tour. The tour guide, let’s say at Casa Loma, welcomes the tourists, tells them what’s on the tour, and then before going into the first “room” tells them what the main point or theme of the tour is.

Topic Sentences – for this essay they do not have to contain a reference to each piece of evidence within the paragraph. They can be general but they should be descriptive. If the reader were only to read the thesis statement plus the topic sentences the essay should make sense even to a person who doesn’t know much about the topic.


Concluding Sentences – normally they come AFTER you have made the argument (connection to thesis) for each body paragraph. However, in this essay they may precede the connection to thesis paragraphs. If you are incorporating arguments into your body paragraphs then the CSs come after them. Think back to the tour analogy: before leaving the room, the tour guide would sum up what the tourists had seen in that room before moving on. The argument and the concluding sentence are not the same.

Body Paragraphs – they should be no longer than one page and a few lines. If you need to break up a large sub-topic, don’t forget to add another topic sentence and end each paragraph with its own concluding sentence. In the tour guide analogy, each body paragraph is like a room on the tour.

Concluding Paragraph – 3 components: re-state thesis, re-summarize sub-topics, end with a lesson learned (that shouldn’t be hard for your topics)



Footnotes – basic formats for a book (see also the blog post called Documentation for History Essays):

1. First Last, Title of Book (City: Publisher, Year), 22.

2. Ibid. (use only if the previous footnote is from the same source, same page number).

3. Ibid., 23. (use only if the previous footnote is from the same source, different page number).

10. Last, Title of Book, 46. (short form used for subsequent citations, but not if previous footnote is from the same source).


Arguments – Connections to Thesis (recommended to be separate paragraphs):

these can be improved by keeping a few things in mind:

  • don’t merely re-state or summarize what you already said in the evidence
  • explain how the evidence is related to the thesis and your HTCs
  • be deep, not superficial
  • draw conclusions
  • use the guideposts of each HTC
    • Cause/consequence
      • long, medium, short term
      • direct, indirect
      • individual, group, social force
      • multiple factors working together
      • intended/unintended consequences
    • Continuity
      • progress/decline
      • overlap of continuity and change
      • plain old repetition of a pattern
  • explain HTCS – don’t just mention them
  • always link to current event in HTC paragraphs and connections


When Handing Final Essay In: (Friday June 19)

Title page:

  • Your name
  • Title of your essay (not the topic)
  • Date: _____________
  • School: York Mills CI
  • Teacher: Ms. Gluskin
  • Course: CHY4U

Double-spaced (max 12 pages)

Pages numbered

Bibliography can be page 13

Rubric Attached (I will provide this through Google Classroom)


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