Unit 1 Culminating Activity

By , January 5, 2021 2:46 pm

Due Dates:

  1. Notes from 2 sources (see below – only use these authorized sources) due Wed. Feb. 10 at the time of virtual class if possible.

2. Outline for your paragraph is due Friday. (you get feedback from Ms. G to help you!)

3. The final paragraph is due Tues. Feb. 16 by the end of the day.

Paragraph Writing

Writing is a balance of evidence and argument, a balanced see-saw.

Balanced, in theory.
  • When OUT of BALANCE
  • If your writing is evidence-heavy, it’s a LIST.
  • If your writing is argument-heavy, it’s a RANT.
  • You want a nice balance of both argument and evidence.

TIP SHEETS:

CHW3M_Paleo_Neo_Point_vs_Example (2)

Websites for Paleo/Neo Sites

If you choose Catalhoyuk (neo)

search under news, newsletters, then choose a date and look under FINDS for material objects found

Lascaux or Chauvet Cave (paleo)

https://www.nytimes.com/video/world/europe/100000004789226/lascaux-caves-paleolithic-and-new-again.html

Jarmo article in booklet (best not to choose Jarmo, please)

Monte Verde, Chile (paleo)

http://www.sciencemag.org/news/2015/11/oldest-stone-tools-americas-claimed-chile

http://www.sfu.museum/journey/an-en/postsecondaire-postsecondary/monte_verde

https://whc.unesco.org/en/tentativelists/1873/

https://news.vanderbilt.edu/2015/11/18/new-clues-emerge-about-the-earliest-known-americans/

Gobekli Tepe (paleo – neo transition)

Gobekli Tepi articles

Databases and Online Encyclopedia:

You may use the History Reference Centre and Britannica Online.

Access through: https://ymcilibrary.wordpress.com/databases/

User Names / Passwords:

Britannica Schools Edition: trillium / trillium

History Reference Centre: tdsb / trillium 20!

TOPIC SENTENCE

= the first sentence of your paragraph

There is no introduction before it.

TS = main argument + sub-topics described (not listed)

Here’s an example of a good topic sentence that follows the formula: 

Ideal writing is a balance of evidence and argument; evidence should be detailed, while argument should be explained. 

You’ll also notice that the TS above has a semi-colon (;). Ms. G is a fan of the semi-colon because it’s like having two sentences in one.

Another way to think about topic sentences is to have a strong position on a topic.

Take a look at the following and decide if they are effective topic sentences that meet the criteria:

  1. World history should be a required course for all high school students in Ontario.

2. World history should be a required course for all high school students in Ontario because it gives them a solid grounding.

3. World history should be a required course for all high school students in Ontario because it gives them a solid grounding in how the past has shaped the present.

Continuity and Change Vocabulary

Change: progress, evolve, develop, transition, expand, revolutionize, foresee, notice, adapt

Continuity: remain, preserve, stay the same, slow, prevent

Avoid presentism: they were stupid and their technology was so backward compared to ours; they didn’t have technology; they didn’t use computers so they were stupid; they couldn’t figure out how to live like us

Tips to Improve Detail

include the location of the archaeological site and the date of the find.

What did the object look like? How big was it? What was it made out of? Where was it found? What could it have been used for? Think like an archaeologist describing what he/she has dug up!

Tips to Improve Arguments

Explain means make your thinking clear to the reader. I always say, “don’t just say it, explain it.” When improving your writing you must put yourself in someone else’s shoes in order to look at your own writing more objectively.  

ONLY ONE PARAGRAPH

Ms. G does not want multiple paragraphs;  She only asked for one. Your page limit is one page and a half, typed, double-spaced. That length is fine for an argumentative, detailed paragraph.

Feedback from Unit 1 CA Feb 2021

Good start to the course assignments! Here are some areas that everyone can work on as we continue to improve our skills.

  1. When writing, keep your audience in mind. Your reader didn’t read the articles, so you have to be descriptive when giving specific details in the examples. Most of you used specific evidence from one or more of the archaeological sites. Some of you just described paleolithic or neolithic life in general. You get more THINKING marks for being detailed and precise.
  2. In history we generally write in past tense. Try to stay in one tense. It’s less confusing for the reader than if you switch back and forth. For Dragon’s Den you may have to switch to present tense when describing your ranking of the criteria for significance between the two innovations and when you write paragraph 3.
  3. Follow format instructions. I asked for one paragraph, not an essay. In Dragon’s Den, I ask for three separate paragraphs, not one. And no introductory and concluding paragraphs.
  4. Write in your own words. I’m pretty sure there were a lot of sentences taken directly from the sources. If I were to run your work through “Turn-it-in” I’m pretty sure I’d see some plagiarism. Be very cautious. All I have to do is go to the websites you used and find the sentences. That could cost you: ZERO. The solution is to take notes in your own words. When I take notes, it is the thing I spend the most time on. I read a section, think about what it means, and then write it down in my own words. It takes a bit more time but then when I’m working on my outline or draft I KNOW that the words I used are my own and that I don’t have to change them again.
  5. Everyone should look at their see saw to determine how balanced it is. Remember that writing is a balance of detailed evidence and well-explained arguments. Take a look at your see saw and make sure to work on balancing it out for Dragon’s Den.
  6. If your HTC mark was low (under communication), pay attention. The HTC mark for Dragon’s Den is in the application mark (applying the criteria for significance) and in the communication mark (explaining why presentism is to be avoided).
  7. Start early and work in steps. Ask questions if you aren’t sure what to do.

Hope this helps.

Ms. G

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