Paragraph Writing
In unit 1 culminating you will write a formal academic paragraph. Here are tips!!!
Paragraph Writing – A Crucial Building Block
Writing is a balance of evidence and argument, a balanced see-saw.

- When OUT of BALANCE
- If your writing is evidence-heavy, it’s a LIST.
- If your writing is argument-heavy, it’s a RANT.
- You want a nice balance of both argument and evidence.
TIP SHEETS:
CHW3M_Paleo_Neo_Point_vs_Example (2)
Databases and Online Encyclopedia:
You may use the History Reference Centre and Britannica Online.
Access through: https://ymcilibrary.wordpress.com/databases/
User Names / Passwords:
Britannica Schools Edition: trillium / trillium
see TDSB virtual library passwords
TOPIC SENTENCE
= the first sentence of your paragraph
There is no introduction before it.
TS = main argument + sub-topics described (not listed)
Here’s an example of a good topic sentence that follows the formula:
Ideal writing is a balance of evidence and argument; evidence should be detailed, while argument should be explained.
You’ll also notice that the TS above has a semi-colon (;). Ms. G is a fan of the semi-colon because it’s like having two sentences in one.
Another way to think about topic sentences is to have a strong position on a topic.
Take a look at the following and decide if they are effective topic sentences that meet the criteria:
- World history should be a required course for all high school students in Ontario.
2. World history should be a required course for all high school students in Ontario because it gives them a solid grounding.
3. World history should be a required course for all high school students in Ontario because it gives them a solid grounding in how the past has shaped the present.
Continuity and Change Vocabulary
Change: progress, evolve, develop, transition, expand, revolutionize, foresee, notice, adapt
Continuity: remain, preserve, stay the same, slow, prevent
Avoid presentism: they were stupid and their technology was so backward compared to ours; they didn’t have technology; they didn’t use computers so they were stupid; they couldn’t figure out how to live like us
Tips to Improve Detail
include the location of the archaeological site and the date of the find.
What did the object look like? How big was it? What was it made out of? Where was it found? What could it have been used for? Think like an archaeologist describing what he/she has dug up!
Tips to Improve Arguments
Explain means make your thinking clear to the reader. I always say, “don’t just say it, explain it.” When improving your writing you must put yourself in someone else’s shoes in order to look at your own writing more objectively.
ONLY ONE PARAGRAPH
Ms. G does not want multiple paragraphs; She only asked for one. Your page limit is one page and a half, typed, double-spaced. That length is fine for an argumentative, detailed paragraph.
Extra Paragraph Writing Hints
Here are some areas that everyone can work on as we continue to improve our skills.
- When writing, keep your audience in mind. Your reader doesn’t know as much as you, so you have to be descriptive when giving specific details in the examples. Always describe things (objects) in detail by answering as many of the W and H questions as possible. You get more THINKING marks for being detailed and precise.
- In history we generally write in past tense. Try to stay in one tense. If you write in present tense for the unit 1 culminating activity that is fine. Just stay in it.
- Follow format instructions. I asked for one paragraph, not an essay. In Dragon’s Den (unit 2), I will ask for three separate paragraphs, not one. And no introductory and concluding paragraphs.
- Write in your own words. Write your own sentences. Don’t copy anything. If the teacher ran your work through “Turn-it-in” she’d see some plagiarism. Be very cautious. All I have to do is go to the websites you used and find the sentences. That could cost you: ZERO. The solution is to take notes in your own words. When I take notes, it is the thing I spend the most time on. I read a section, think about what it means, and then write it down in my own words. It takes a bit more time but then when I’m working on my outline or draft I KNOW that the words I used are my own and that I don’t have to change them again.
- Everyone should look at their see saw to determine how balanced it is. Remember that writing is a balance of detailed evidence and well-explained arguments. Take a look at your see saw and make sure to work on balancing it out.
- Start early and work in steps. Ask questions if you aren’t sure what to do.
Hope this helps.
Ms. G
Websites for Paleo/Neo Sites (not using Sem 1 2021-22)
If you choose Catalhoyuk (neo)
- Catalhoyuk, Turkey site: http://wwcatalhoyuk.com/
search under news, newsletters, then choose a date and look under FINDS for material objects found
- https://www.smm.org/catal/artifacts/ground_stone_tools/
- https://www.smm.org/catal/artifacts/chipped_stone_tools/
- Catal Hoyuk – photos from the site
- Catal Hoyuk – preserving it in 3D – video
- Catalhoyuk Archive Reports (Stanford website)
- Catalhoyuk Digital Reconstruction (Virtual Reality)
Lascaux or Chauvet Cave (paleo)
- Chauvet cave: http://www.culture.gouv.fr/culture/arcnat/chauvet/en/
- Lascaux
- cave: http://www.culture.gouv.fr/culture/arcnat/lascaux/en/
- Lascaux video: https://www.nytimes.com/video/world/europe/100000004789226/lascaux-caves-paleolithic-and-new-again.html
- Chauvet video: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q2ycvQ80MdA
- Lascaux website: http://www.bradshawfoundation.com/lascaux/
Jarmo article in booklet (best not to choose Jarmo, please)
Monte Verde, Chile (paleo)
http://www.sciencemag.org/news/2015/11/oldest-stone-tools-americas-claimed-chile
http://www.sfu.museum/journey/an-en/postsecondaire-postsecondary/monte_verde
https://whc.unesco.org/en/tentativelists/1873/
https://news.vanderbilt.edu/2015/11/18/new-clues-emerge-about-the-earliest-known-americans/
Gobekli Tepe (paleo – neo transition)
- Article in Archaeology Archive: http://archive.archaeology.org/0811/abstracts/turkey.html
- Smithsonian Magazine: http://www.smithsonianmag.com/history-archaeology/gobekli-tepe.html
- Gobekli Tepe: http://www.gobeklitepe.info
- National Geographic Article: http://ngm.nationalgeographic.com/2011/06/gobekli-tepe/mann-text
- BBC/British Museum, A History of the World in 100 Objects: http://www.bbc.co.uk/ahistoryoftheworld/
Unit 1 culminating activity – structure tips – video: