CCA Step 6 (Draft of Essay)

By , December 15, 2011 11:18 pm

The draft is due on Thurs. June 6.

Drafts require:

  • Introductory paragraph
  • Body paragraphs, each with topic and concluding sentences
  • Connection to thesis/HTC paragraphs (if they are separate – otherwise part of body paragraphs)
  • Concluding paragraph
  • Footnotes for ALL evidence  CHY4U_Footnote_Format
  • Bibliography at the end (does not count in page count)
  • Max 12 pages double-spaced (minimum 10 point font, normal margins)


when Ms. G was working on turning her essay outline into a draft she did the following things IN THIS ORDER:

  1. first made all changes/improvements in the outline
  2. then converted tables to text
  3. made separate paragraphs for connections to thesis/HTC (because body paragraphs were getting too long)
  4. converted mini citations into footnotes (this can take a long time – give yourself enough time)
  5. added bibliography
  6. divided large sub-topics into smaller body paragraphs
  7. wrote basic topic and concluding sentences for body paragraphs
  8. added intro paragraph
  9. added concluding paragraph

Samples (and process):

Ms. G__Step5_Essay_Draft_1_2019 (May 18 – I converted tables to text, added footnotes, noted where to add TSs and CSs, noted that some paragraphs might need splitting, noted where to add Intro and Conclusion, added bibliography.)

Ms. G__Step6_Essay_Draft_2_2019 (May 20 – I added most of the TSs and CSs. I separated some of the HTCs into new paragraphs. I finished the intro. I finished most of the conclusion.  I still have to fix up some of the footnotes and finish off the conclusion. I need to make sure the transitions are effective).

Ms.-G__Step6_Essay_Draft_3_2019 (June 4 – I finished splitting large paragraphs. Added more transitions. I still need to finish the conclusion and get rid of all the headings.)

Last year

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft1_2017-18 (Dec. 20 – I converted my tables to text, added footnotes, noted where to add TSs and CSs, split up some paragraphs, noted where to add Intro and Conclusion)

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft2_2017-18 (Dec. 30 and Jan. 1 – I added in all TSs and CSs, blocked out my intro and conclusion, divided large sub-topics, added in some transitions. I still need to add bibliography and fix up my footnotes).

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft3_2017-18 (Jan. 9 – Mostly finished – added bibliography but still need to edit its format; still need to fix up some footnotes, Finished intro and conclusion. )

MsG_Sample_CHY4U_Essay_Draft4_2017-18 (Jan. 12 – Mostly finished – added title page – make sure yours doesn’t have a number on it)

MsG_CHY4U_Essay_Draft1_May22_2016 (last year)

  • I inserted comments to highlight for you the process I took to turn my outline into a draft
  • If you wrote your outline on the template, make sure you convert it from table to text


Essay Rubric:


Drafts are due and peer evaluation takes place on  June 6.



Editing and proofreading:

editing involves revising the structure (changing the order of examples, sub-dividing sub-topics into body paragraphs, changing the order of sub-topics, making sure connections to thesis are in the correct place, making sure all body paragraphs have TSs and CSs, making sure all evidence is cited [footnoted])

proofreading  involves checking spelling, grammar and style (third person academic)


Though you are supposed to bring a draft on June 6, it doesn’t mean it should be your first draft: probably your second or third.


Self and Peer Evaluation:

CHY4U_CCA_Essay_SelfPeer_Eval_2017-18 (this is mainly for structure)


Worksheets in CCA Handout Package:


More common grammar errors


CHY 4U How to improve your knowledge mark for the CCA Essay_Revised



CRAAP Tests:

If you are missing website reliability tests, please complete them and hand them in with the essay.



Structure Tips:

Intro – 3 components: hook, summary of sub-topics, thesis statement. Nothing more, nothing less. I like to use the analogy of a tour. The tour guide, let’s say at Casa Loma, welcomes the tourists, tells them what’s on the tour, and then before going into the first “room” tells them what the main point or theme of the tour is.

Topic Sentences – for this essay they do not have to contain a reference to each piece of evidence within the paragraph. They can be general but they should be descriptive. If the reader were only to read the thesis statement plus the topic sentences the essay should make sense even to a person who doesn’t know much about the topic.

Bibliography and Topic Sentences

Concluding Sentences – normally they come AFTER you have made the argument (connection to thesis) for each body paragraph. However, in this essay they may precede the connection to thesis paragraphs. If you are incorporating arguments into your body paragraphs then the CSs come after them. Think back to the tour analogy: before leaving the room, the tour guide would sum up what the tourists had seen in that room before moving on. The argument and the concluding sentence are not the same.

Body Paragraphs – they should be no longer than one page and a few lines. If you need to break up a large sub-topic, don’t forget to add another topic sentence and end each paragraph with its own concluding sentence. In the tour guide analogy, each body paragraph is like a room on the tour.

Concluding Paragraph – 3 components: re-state thesis, re-summarize sub-topics, end with a lesson learned (that shouldn’t be hard for your topics)



Footnotes – basic formats for a book (see also the blog post called Documentation for History Essays):

1. First Last, Title of Book (City: Publisher, Year), 22.

2. Ibid. (use only if the previous footnote is from the same source).

3. Ibid., 23. (use only if the previous footnote is from the same source, different page).

10. Last, Title of Book, 46. (short form used for subsequent citations, but not if previous footnote is from the same source).


Arguments – Connections to Thesis (recommended to be separate paragraphs):

these can be improved by keeping a few things in mind:

  • don’t merely re-state or summarize what you already said in the evidence
  • explain how the evidence is related to the thesis and your HTCs
  • be deep, not superficial
  • draw conclusions
  • use the guideposts of each HTC
    • Cause/consequence
      • long, medium, short term
      • direct, indirect
      • individual, group, social force
      • multiple factors working together
      • intended/unintended consequences
    • Continuity
      • progress/decline
      • overlap of continuity and change
      • plain old repetition of a pattern
  • explain HTCS – don’t just mention them
  • always link to current event in HTC paragraphs and connections


When Handing Final Essay In: (Monday June 10)

Title page:

  • Your name
  • Title of your essay (not the topic)
  • Date: _____________
  • School: York Mills CI
  • Teacher: Ms. Gluskin
  • Course: CHY4U

Double-spaced (max 12 pages)

Pages numbered

Bibliography can be page 13

Rubric Attached

Any missing CRAAP tests handed in.


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